moon jumper

Not shabby - By that I mean... AWESOME! Anyway, you give thorough descriptions and your writing is great! This is going to be a good story. If you need any ...

That was good. There were a few words misspelled if I recall, and an adjective that was placed confusingly. But apart from that it was good. My friend at first ...

Wow. That was really good. When I read it, it had a gentle rocking motion for me. I like it. Scratch that. I love it! You have a way with ...

Wow. Very nice. A few misspellings, but it's so long I won't be able to find them again unfortunately. Your friend is a talented writer, should definitely get a user ...

It was good, but Mackenzie's love for Dorine just...happened. It was abrupt, so sudden. And then Dorine just tells him her life secret and falls for him. It's like the ...

Hi. Okay, then. As said, this was kinda short. I also found it confusing in the middle. I had to stop and re-read a sentence a few times before I ...

Hey Jared. Umm...Sorry, but I have no clue what NaNo is...I guess I'm in la-la land or something- Anywho, here's my critique. Grammar - Everything's basically good. I believe it's ...